I sat on my knees and peeped through THE keyhole, 'The greatest invention of mankind.' It's shape seemed to be like an inverted drop of water, the most refreshing drop that I ever encountered in my life. I thought I could look through it for ages. For through that tiny hole, I could for the first time see those lovely eyes so closely and for such a long time.
The Magic, that your eyes behold,
A Thousand lovely tales, untold.
The sparkle in your eyes, Oh Love!
Is like the brightest, snow-white Dove.
I wished to say, but I couldn't. I sat there wondering when was the first time I spoke about her to Robins, my best friend. "Ah, I distinctly remember", I said in my mind.
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It isn't even 8 months since she came to our college and she is already an addiction. I never talked to her, actually never got the courage. But I think, at instances our eyes have met. It was on those little instances, that I sipped those odd drops of life, extending my license to live for probably a few more hours. It was in those moments of euphony, that I asked her several questions about her life, about what she thought of me and told her about how much I admire her, love her. I could never speak it out, but I only hoped that I was successful in establishing the mental connection.
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I remember this is what I said. But that time seems a distant past now, probably several aeons back. And I have made no progress. In a months time, I will leave this home of mine for a strange territory, which I so fear to tread. I have decided, that I will give it one genuine effort before I finally quit.I sat there, sometimes appreciating her and sometimes THE MOST BEAUTIFUL and definitely the luckiest keyhole I had encountered.
I looked at my watch, it was six, in an hour or two she will go for dinner, I will have to act fast. For a moment I was really confused as to which among the two seemed more magical, more mystical. I looked at my watch, it was half past eight.
I don't remember what she was doing or how her room looked, or where I was. I didn't even remember who I was and how did I come here. "Wait, I remember", I tried to recall my state of mind before reaching here.
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Here I am standing in front of her hostel room, outside her door, trying to gather courage, to tell her of my feelings. I know, I have none (The courage I mean). Wait, what's that??
A keyhole.
voice from somewhere: 'No, don't think of it Om, its unethical!!!!'
Uh, right, its unethical, well I don't claim to be a man of ethics. Its just once, just for the first and last time. , 'Everything is fair in Love and War', I guess someone had written that line for me and considering my present state of mind, I can comfortably declare that ITS WAR.
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Yes that's what I said. It was virtually a DO-OR-DIE for me. Even that seemed a distant past now. All I really cared for was, I was looking at the most beautiful person on this planet and she wasn't complaining. I couldn't think of any means to thank THE KEYHOLE. The most wonderful moments of my life were only because of its help.
And then suddenly she was out of my sight, no longer in the frame of the magical keyhole, and then I realized how badly my knees were paining. But I wasn't complaining. I remembered a portion of another poem I wrote for her,
The eerie winter dawn
concerneth me no more.
Thy lips-the petals, thy tresses-the feathers
thy eyes-the hearty ripples
on the river's lovely shore.
I looked around at a strange world. Everything seemed so blurred for 5 minutes, I had strained my eyes far too much. And then I saw Robins taking a bunch of Roses to Laila's room, I guess it is her birthday today. "Hey, Wait Robins!!! One of your roses....", I wished to say, but something stopped me. I don't know what it was. I picked up the rose, while still on my knees. The door opened up and there she was standing in front of me and I was there on my knees and then there was this ROSE.
The Sands of time go thinning away,
Black clouds have blocked the silver ray.
Throw off the veil, Let there be light.
For my eyes seek the Friendship of your sight.
I don't have powers nor a magical wand,
My feelings for you ask thee for your hand.
A soul, for friendship is all I seek.
A yes from your side is all I see..............
I wished I could tell her this poem, which gave me company in sleepless nights, for it symbolised her. And believe me I did. I didn't have to do anything after that. We bought a new house last week and guess the name I gave it. You are right, We call it THE KEYHOLE.
16 comments:
Believe me Nishant, you are maturing into a writer of enviable capacity.
>> First of all, the style running through, is unique n distinctly different from the ones I've previously encountered.
>> The Keyhole.. the house.... no..no .. the HOME ! Beautiful, man!
>> The way you've used devices of romanticism is pretty masterly.
Its still very early days, but yes.. you are a star in the making. You always had an admirer in me. Now, you have a fan!!
Thanks a lot for such a wonderful criticism yaar.
I look at my piece and then at your comments, I am forced to wonder which one is presented better.
I will certainly not rate thi piece anywhere near in comparison to few of yours.
oye tu serious hai kya?
serious matlab,
this is purely fictitious, any resemblance of the prose with my real life is purely co-incidental.
I wonder which one of my pieces do you find good enough to compare with this beauty!
btw, a minor doubt:
why tht 'OM'??
Well, I know, its all fiction. But still, any special reason ahy you didn't use any other name?
well actually that was the first name to strike my mind. I don't know why, though.
Man you are damn good. All i can say and hope that you nurture your talent in the future. Wonderful, captivating and i am running out of adjectives here. Hats off to you!!!
waise initially i thought the story is about you, but as i went through it, i realized it was fictious but with the 'tadka' of your own little love story
Thanks a lot yaar
Well Actually I put a bit of Tadka of my life, just to get myself involved and to capture the feel.
Thats really beautiful and I think it is a
very good piece. But don't you think that a keyhole is little too small for such a big poem to pass in. Any way that is a good piece except the rose
Oh ho,
Yahaan bhi PJ.
Waise thanks a lot.
Thanks a lot friend,
By the way is there any chance that I know you.
well,neither i am a diehard romantic at heart nor do i fancy reading such material.thats probably becuz i understand and relate to anything but feelings and emotions..but,i dont know why after reading "keyhole"once,i felt like reading it again...and then again..fir ek bar aur..it so turned out that i read it 4 times.there was something that kept me welded to this piece of work.may be i wanted to delve into the life of a guy who is different from me or maybe i wanted to figure out how much resemblance does it have with your life or maybe that i tried 2 find where do i fit in this(hey!watch out.am getting emotional)..
and the most important thing-dont xpect me to believe that it is purely fictitous and doesnt reflect your emotions(read desperateness!)..lol..
thanks a lot yaar. Making others feel what you feel, is what writing is all about. And if I am even a little bit succesful in that, then there is no happiness that can be better than that.
"mesmerised"......guess this is the first word which comes into this unromantic mind of mine! and i am (over)confident that this word is quite insufficient to describe this wonderful piece. i still stick to the fact that i resent anything related to romanticism, be it anything, but i overtly confess that i was glued to each and every line you wrote , till the end.
maybe because it was quite difficult to believe that it is a work of a "merely" an "upcoming" literary maestro....what i mean to say is that if this equals "upcoming", one may well envisage the products of an "established"!! hope u take the world by storm someday!!
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